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Personal Narrative Analysis

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The first opening is the most successful opening to Cody’s piece. The first opening solidly places us in small-town Ardmore, Alabama, which I assume is a crucial part of the story, and introduces one of the conflicts for the characters—the winter storm, for which no Alabamian is ever adequately prepared. It also shows us Jon’s pessimism, depression, and general disdain for others, which is integral to the narrative. However, I think a way to make these openings more successful overall is to pay close attention to diction and grammar. Sentence variation is incredibly important in writing; without adequate sentence variation, the text begins to sound monotonous and disengaging. I think more free indirect style would hook the reader more as well.
The contract is that this is a story about Jon, a nihilistic man living in a small town that he hates, who is preparing for a winter storm. My assumption from this opening is that he is at constant conflict with the town in which he lives, and that the story will play on this tension throughout the rest of the piece. …show more content…

I think the first opening hooked me personally because it reminded me of my father’s hometown in north Alabama, so I knew off the bat what this town looked like. But the second opening was interesting because it ended on a very specific image that I don’t encounter much—the CNN decades documentaries, specifically an episode about Bill Clinton—so I’m enticed by this specific detail, expecting more in the following pages. The dialogue was similarly engaging, but I think in general, these openings should be

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